One day, Mickey Mouse begged Minnie Mouse to give him 1/3 of a cookie she was eating. Mickey Mouse already ate a certain amount of cookies, but nicely Minnie mouse did give him 1/3 of a cookie. Mickey Mouse continuously begged Minnie Mouse once a day for 6 days, and Minnie Mouse was just to sweet that she did give him 1/3 of her cookie every time. Also, he was continuously eating the same amount of cookies he ate in the first day before begging Minnie Mouse. After 6 days, Mickey Mouse found out that he ate 20 cookies. How much cookies has Mickey Mouse already ate before Minnie Mouse gave him per day?
I think the part "Mickey Mouse already ate a certain amount of cookies, but nicely Minnie mouse did give him 1/3 of a cookie." is a little confusing because it says that Mickey mouse already ate a cookie, but Minnie Mouse gave him 1/3 of a cookie. I think everything is great overall! :D
I think that the idea is quite creative but the structure is confusing. This is because you made the story too long. The first part of the story was good, however starting from Also.. it got really weird and confusing. I think you should simplify your story. I think it is amusing seeing Mickey Mouse begging. Also "to" should be "too".
It's not clear in the part: Mickey Mouse already ate a certain amount of cookie (What cookie? Who’s cookie?) Also, he was continuously eating the same amount of cookies he ate in the first day before begging Minnie Mouse. (wording is confusing)
The story does fit with the equation and it is functional, because it step by step explained what happened. The story is creative and original because you used SPECIFIC main characters, unlike characters like bear or rabbit, but you actually used MICKEY MOUSE!!! We liked it that you used Disney characters to make it more fun and amusing to the readers. I think cookie is a very simple snack, so I think it would be more amusing to read if you put specific names like Pop Tarts or Reese’s.
One day, Mickey Mouse begged Minnie Mouse to give him 1/3 of a cookie she was eating. Mickey Mouse already ate a certain amount of cookies(this is the x), but nicely Minnie mouse did give him 1/3 of a cookie. Mickey Mouse repeated this routine for the whole week. After 6 days, Mickey Mouse found out that he ate 20 cookies. How much cookies has Mickey Mouse already ate before Minnie Mouse gave him per day?
One day, Mickey Mouse begged Minnie Mouse to give him 1/3 of a cookie she was eating. However Mickey Mouse already ate a certain amount of cookies(this is the x). Mickey Mouse repeated eating the same amount of cookies and begged Minnie Mouse for 1/3 of a cookie for a week. After the week past, Mickey Mouse found out that he ate 20 cookies. How much cookies has Mickey Mouse already ate before Minnie Mouse gave him per day?
One day, Mickey Mouse begged Minnie Mouse to give him 1/3 of a cookie she was eating. However Mickey Mouse already ate a certain amount of cookies(this is the x). Mickey Mouse repeated eating the same amount of cookies and begged Minnie Mouse for 1/3 of a cookie for six days. After six days past, Mickey Mouse found out that he ate total of twenty cookies. How much cookies has Mickey Mouse already ate before Minnie Mouse gave him per day?
One day, Mickey Mouse begged Minnie Mouse to give him 1/3 of a cookie she was eating. However Mickey Mouse already ate a certain amount of cookies(this is the x). Mickey Mouse repeated eating the same amount of cookies and begged Minnie Mouse for 1/3 of a cookie for six days. After six days past, Mickey Mouse found out that he ate a total of twenty cookies. How much cookies did Mickey Mouse already eat per day before he begged Minnie Mouse?
One day, Mickey Mouse begged Minnie Mouse to give him 1/3 of a cookie she was eating. Mickey Mouse already ate a certain amount of cookies, but nicely Minnie mouse did give him 1/3 of a cookie. Mickey Mouse continuously begged Minnie Mouse once a day for 6 days, and Minnie Mouse was just to sweet that she did give him 1/3 of her cookie every time. Also, he was continuously eating the same amount of cookies he ate in the first day before begging Minnie Mouse. After 6 days, Mickey Mouse found out that he ate 20 cookies. How much cookies has Mickey Mouse already ate before Minnie Mouse gave him per day?
ReplyDeleteI think the part "Mickey Mouse already ate a certain amount of cookies, but nicely Minnie mouse did give him 1/3 of a cookie." is a little confusing because it says that Mickey mouse already ate a cookie, but Minnie Mouse gave him 1/3 of a cookie. I think everything is great overall! :D
DeleteI think that the idea is quite creative but the structure is confusing. This is because you made the story too long. The first part of the story was good, however starting from Also.. it got really weird and confusing. I think you should simplify your story. I think it is amusing seeing Mickey Mouse begging. Also "to" should be "too".
ReplyDeleteIt's not clear in the part:
ReplyDeleteMickey Mouse already ate a certain amount of cookie
(What cookie? Who’s cookie?)
Also, he was continuously eating the same amount of cookies he ate in the first day before begging Minnie Mouse.
(wording is confusing)
The story does fit with the equation and it is functional, because it step by step explained what happened.
The story is creative and original because you used SPECIFIC main characters, unlike characters like bear or rabbit, but you actually used MICKEY MOUSE!!!
We liked it that you used Disney characters to make it more fun and amusing to the readers.
I think cookie is a very simple snack, so I think it would be more amusing to read if you put specific names like Pop Tarts or Reese’s.
One day, Mickey Mouse begged Minnie Mouse to give him 1/3 of a cookie she was eating. Mickey Mouse already ate a certain amount of cookies(this is the x), but nicely Minnie mouse did give him 1/3 of a cookie. Mickey Mouse repeated this routine for the whole week. After 6 days, Mickey Mouse found out that he ate 20 cookies. How much cookies has Mickey Mouse already ate before Minnie Mouse gave him per day?
ReplyDeleteOne day, Mickey Mouse begged Minnie Mouse to give him 1/3 of a cookie she was eating. However Mickey Mouse already ate a certain amount of cookies(this is the x). Mickey Mouse repeated eating the same amount of cookies and begged Minnie Mouse for 1/3 of a cookie for a week. After the week past, Mickey Mouse found out that he ate 20 cookies. How much cookies has Mickey Mouse already ate before Minnie Mouse gave him per day?
ReplyDeleteOne day, Mickey Mouse begged Minnie Mouse to give him 1/3 of a cookie she was eating. However Mickey Mouse already ate a certain amount of cookies(this is the x). Mickey Mouse repeated eating the same amount of cookies and begged Minnie Mouse for 1/3 of a cookie for six days. After six days past, Mickey Mouse found out that he ate total of twenty cookies. How much cookies has Mickey Mouse already ate before Minnie Mouse gave him per day?
ReplyDeleteOne day, Mickey Mouse begged Minnie Mouse to give him 1/3 of a cookie she was eating. However Mickey Mouse already ate a certain amount of cookies(this is the x). Mickey Mouse repeated eating the same amount of cookies and begged Minnie Mouse for 1/3 of a cookie for six days. After six days past, Mickey Mouse found out that he ate a total of twenty cookies. How much cookies did Mickey Mouse already eat per day before he begged Minnie Mouse?
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