Sponge Bob made 100 Krabby-patties today. A strange customer came to the Krusty Krab 7 times that day. He was the only customer that came that weekday. Each time he got the same order with the same amount of krabby-patties. He was dressed in a new disguise each time he came. Lazy Squidward did not realize that this mystery customer was Plankton! Plankton needed the Krabby Patties to do tests to find out the secret formula. At the end of the day, Sponge Bob had 44 crabby-patties left over to feed his pet Gary. Mr. Krabs wanted to know how many krabby-patties were sold that day.
The story fits the equation and you had a theme. The story problem matched with their equation and it was correct. The story makes sense but the name makes it a bit confusing, and the number of characters. Please decrease the number of the characters. The grammar and convention was perfect, no mistakes. The story was creative because of the weird names, and all about disguising. Maybe, you can be creative about the theme, not the name of the characters. The positive point of this word problem was that the character name was creative, and the equation fit well with the problem.
This sentence should be revised: Each time he got the same order with the same amount of krabby-patties. -> so change "he" into Sponge Bob to make it clear.
Also this part is unnecessary: He was dressed in a new disguise each time he came. Lazy Squidward did not realize that this mystery customer was Plankton! Plankton needed the Krabby Patties to do tests to find out the secret formula.
The story was very creative and amusing to use Sponge Bob!
This sentence should be revised: Each time he got the same order with the same amount of krabby-patties. -> so change "he" into Sponge Bob to make it clear. because "he" seems like the strange customer.
Also this part is unnecessary, because it just makes the readers confusing. He was dressed in a new disguise each time he came. Lazy Squidward did not realize that this mystery customer was Plankton! Plankton needed the Krabby Patties to do tests to find out the secret formula.
The story was very creative and amusing to use Sponge Bob! It was unique to talk about the strange customers. Nice job!
This sentence should be revised: Each time he got the same order with the same amount of krabby-patties. -> so change "he" into Sponge Bob to make it clear. because "he" seems like the strange customer.
Also this part is unnecessary, because it just makes the readers confusing. He was dressed in a new disguise each time he came. Lazy Squidward did not realize that this mystery customer was Plankton! Plankton needed the Krabby Patties to do tests to find out the secret formula.
Lastly change the numbers into verbal expression. (ex: 3 --> three)
The story was very creative and amusing to use Sponge Bob! It was unique to talk about the strange customers. Nice job!
This sentence should be revised: Each time he got the same order with the same amount of krabby-patties. -> so change "he" into Sponge Bob to make it clear. because "he" seems like the strange customer.
Also this part is unnecessary, because it just makes the readers confusing. "He was dressed in a new disguise each time he came. Lazy Squidward did not realize that this mystery customer was Plankton! Plankton needed the Krabby Patties to do tests to find out the secret formula."
Lastly change the numbers into verbal expression. (ex: 3 --> three)
The story was very creative and amusing to use Sponge Bob! It was unique to talk about the strange customers. Nice job!
I really like it that your story was very creative and had a actual story, which was Spongebob. I like it that it was it was NOT a RANDOM topic, and there were good characterization. There are no grammatical or spelling errors. As Rachel and Gyuri’s group said, THIS: Each time he got the same order with the same amount of krabby-patties. The “he” should be changed to Spongebob to make the readers solve the problem with clarity. Maybe you can put less information of the characters, because it gets kind of confusing. Otherwise, it’s very good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Sponge Bob made 100 krabby-patties today. A strange customer came to the Krusty Krab 7 times that day. He was the only customer that came that day. Each time the strange customer bought the same order with the same amount of krabby-patties (7 times, same amount=7R). The mystery customer was Plankton who was trying to steal the krabby-patty formula! At the end of the day, Sponge Bob had 44 krabby-patties left over to feed his pet snail Gary. Mr. Krabs (the owner of the restaurant) wanted to know how many krabby-patties were sold that day. Mr Krabs wanted to know how many krabby-patties the high-paying customer bought each time he came to the restaurant. Solve for R.
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Sponge Bob made 100 Krabby-patties today. A strange customer came to the Krusty Krab 7 times that day. He was the only customer that came that weekday. Each time he got the same order with the same amount of krabby-patties. He was dressed in a new disguise each time he came. Lazy Squidward did not realize that this mystery customer was Plankton! Plankton needed the Krabby Patties to do tests to find out the secret formula. At the end of the day, Sponge Bob had 44 crabby-patties left over to feed his pet Gary. Mr. Krabs wanted to know how many krabby-patties were sold that day.
The story fits the equation and you had a theme. The story problem matched with their equation and it was correct. The story makes sense but the name makes it a bit confusing, and the number of characters. Please decrease the number of the characters. The grammar and convention was perfect, no mistakes. The story was creative because of the weird names, and all about disguising. Maybe, you can be creative about the theme, not the name of the characters. The positive point of this word problem was that the character name was creative, and the equation fit well with the problem.
DeleteThis sentence should be revised:
DeleteEach time he got the same order with the same amount of krabby-patties.
-> so change "he" into Sponge Bob to make it clear.
Also this part is unnecessary:
He was dressed in a new disguise each time he came. Lazy Squidward did not realize that this mystery customer was Plankton! Plankton needed the Krabby Patties to do tests to find out the secret formula.
The story was very creative and amusing to use Sponge Bob!
This sentence should be revised:
DeleteEach time he got the same order with the same amount of krabby-patties.
-> so change "he" into Sponge Bob to make it clear.
because "he" seems like the strange customer.
Also this part is unnecessary, because it just makes the readers confusing.
He was dressed in a new disguise each time he came. Lazy Squidward did not realize that this mystery customer was Plankton! Plankton needed the Krabby Patties to do tests to find out the secret formula.
The story was very creative and amusing to use Sponge Bob!
It was unique to talk about the strange customers. Nice job!
This sentence should be revised:
DeleteEach time he got the same order with the same amount of krabby-patties.
-> so change "he" into Sponge Bob to make it clear.
because "he" seems like the strange customer.
Also this part is unnecessary, because it just makes the readers confusing.
He was dressed in a new disguise each time he came. Lazy Squidward did not realize that this mystery customer was Plankton! Plankton needed the Krabby Patties to do tests to find out the secret formula.
Lastly change the numbers into verbal expression. (ex: 3 --> three)
The story was very creative and amusing to use Sponge Bob!
It was unique to talk about the strange customers. Nice job!
This sentence should be revised:
DeleteEach time he got the same order with the same amount of krabby-patties.
-> so change "he" into Sponge Bob to make it clear.
because "he" seems like the strange customer.
Also this part is unnecessary, because it just makes the readers confusing.
"He was dressed in a new disguise each time he came. Lazy Squidward did not realize that this mystery customer was Plankton! Plankton needed the Krabby Patties to do tests to find out the secret formula."
Lastly change the numbers into verbal expression. (ex: 3 --> three)
The story was very creative and amusing to use Sponge Bob!
It was unique to talk about the strange customers. Nice job!
I really like it that your story was very creative and had a actual story, which was Spongebob. I like it that it was it was NOT a RANDOM topic, and there were good characterization. There are no grammatical or spelling errors. As Rachel and Gyuri’s group said, THIS:
ReplyDeleteEach time he got the same order with the same amount of krabby-patties.
The “he” should be changed to Spongebob to make the readers solve the problem with clarity. Maybe you can put less information of the characters, because it gets kind of confusing. Otherwise, it’s very good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Sponge Bob made 100 krabby-patties today. A strange customer came to the Krusty Krab 7 times that day. He was the only customer that came that day. Each time the strange customer bought the same order with the same amount of krabby-patties (7 times, same amount=7R). The mystery customer was Plankton who was trying to steal the krabby-patty formula! At the end of the day, Sponge Bob had 44 krabby-patties left over to feed his pet snail Gary. Mr. Krabs (the owner of the restaurant) wanted to know how many krabby-patties were sold that day. Mr Krabs wanted to know how many krabby-patties the high-paying customer bought each time he came to the restaurant. Solve for R.
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